Room 20 have been exploring effective hooks. Together we shared what we knew and discussed what we might see in really effective hooks. We levelled some before we had a go ourselves.
Would you keep reading if this was the hook the writing started with?
Suddenly, Broom, Broom! What's that? Oh, it's just a motorbike, off I go. 'Weeee' I said in my mind.
We decided that Thomas has written an effective hook.